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AoD: Chapter 15 Later that night, many miles away in a cave was a woman, a witch to be exact. She sat among the other imprisoned wizards, humans, and other creatures. Of course, it was all the work of the Dark Lord and his minions. The witch had long brown hair, some of it flowing down her back and the rest to her chest. The right side of it seemed to go down longer. She wore a strapless dress and appeared to be young, but was actually in her 50's in human years. There was a blue jewel around her neck. It was a custom for all witches to wear the birth stone of their month of birth around their neck. Her legs were shackled, but thankfuAoD: Chapter 15
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The story jumped back and forth from one place to another in a quite confusing manner but that isn't my main gripe.
The main problem is that the characters didn't seem believable enough they seemed to be just rehashes of different cliches.
They may be minor charaters for all I know but it's still important that they seem somewhat believable.
You could try to make a make a backstory for each of the more important characters and flesh out their personality somewhat. There's a reason why they act like they do, right?
But keep on writing and you will get better thats for sure.
B.t.w. the art is quite good.
Ok the first chapter is more like a prolouge, it's there to start off the story. My more recent chapters has gone into the "flashbacks". So it would be nice if you actually read more than one chapter to give criticsm such as yours.
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Nice idea to make a new account for your story. It's easier to follow the story line when there's no other art stuff in the gallery.
Keep up the good work! ^_0
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